Trucker Love

NEW: Here's the end.

Figured I'd throw this on for your thoughts and advice. On Tuesday, I pitched a short serial out of the 2005 National Truck Driving Championships this week in Tampa. The bosses gave me Wednesday to report and said they'd decide if we wanted to do it again when I had written the first piece.

So I went in early and reported broad and at the end of the day I could have gone three ways with this story: father and son truckers reconnecting at the championship; the oddity of a husband supporting his trucker wife; and, finally, a love story.

I went with this.

My question: Does it work? Lenth? Cliffhanger?

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