Grandma's Got A .38

Hey, let's give Susan Daker from the Mobile Press-Register some feedback on this story:



Ethel Sanders, 81, was startled awake by noise coming from her laundry room on Monday morning, she said. She grabbed her .38-caliber pistol and moved to the porch steps of her shotgun house in north Mobile.



Standing on two bad knees, without the aid of her walker, she opened the door to the laundry room to find a nearly naked intruder, apparently washing his clothes.



I loved the ending here, although I was hoping for a tighter narrative line and maybe slightly fewer quotes. What do y'all think?